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PostSubject: Dance with Evil   Thu Aug 23, 2012 8:47 am

This is the poem from the start of my novel, Dance with Evil. Enjoy!

Fear dark corners of the mind
In seeing yourself, you are blind
Beware your own conceit
Karma you cannot cheat

Heed the inner voice
That leaves you with a choice
To think twice or not at all
Disregard it and you will fall

When fear creeps up your spine
And on your psyche does dine
Take note of what it whispers
Dear brothers and sisters


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PostSubject: Re: Dance with Evil   Thu Aug 23, 2012 9:18 am

Great poem. Very Happy

Good for start of book too in the genre you write.

Good profound verse.
I might do something similar next book I write. Don't know when though. lol!

The structure is good and rhyming is excellent.

Enjoyed the read.

Hope to see a lot more.

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PostSubject: Re: Dance with Evil   Thu Aug 23, 2012 9:20 am

Thanks Retro Smile It took some time to get that right, because poetry really isn't my thing. This is one of the few poems I wrote that I'm proud of Cool

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